The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the stages of the process
that is
used to produce
bricks
for the construction industry.
Overal
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, the whole
proces
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process
consists of 7 main phases, starting from
digginf
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digging
a
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the
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clay
to
delivery
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the end product.
It is clear that
the
the
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manufacture of
bricks
require
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using different types of
mashinery
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machinery
and should be supervised by a
humanbeing
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human being
. Focusing first on the processing of raw materials, first of
all
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this
process
involve
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digging by escalator in order to mine the
clay
, after which the
clay
on a metal grid is placed on a rolles which prepare
this
substance
to
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the
folloving
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following
processes. To formulate the mixture for
bricks
,water and sand should be added to the clear
clay
and, after mixing it up, the substance goes to
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a molds
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molds
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or wire cutter. As for the remaining stages,
rectungular
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rectangular
bricks
are send
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for the
folloving
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following
procedures, the first one being connected with drying, which lasts up to 48 hours in a drying
owen
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oven
Owen
.
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bricks
go to the klin which
use
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uses
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moderate and high temperatures, 200-980 and 870-1300 Celsium
centigrees
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centigrams
, Eventually, the product should be cooled in a cooling chamber for 72 hours. After all, the
bricks
are packaged and loaded into the lorry, which
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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