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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six month period in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six month period in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given graph illustrates information about how
many
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 data
collected
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was collected
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 from the Tourist Information Office in a city for 6 months.
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, it is noticeable that the figure by letter or email decreased significantly,
while
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 the number in
two
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the two
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 groups both increased. Looking in more detail, the roughly 450 surveys
was
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were
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 by letter or email in January. Meanwhile, it decreased substantially, reaching approximately 380 in May.
This
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 number stabilized at around
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380 from
 May to June.
On the other hand
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, the numbers by telephone started
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 highest point accounting for about 900 in January. Between February and April, there was a slight fluctuation hovering around 900. In June, it reached
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roughly 1600.
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, the enquiry in person began the lowest trend in January, by recording at 450.
This
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 number has experienced a significant
increased
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 from around 600 in February to about 1700 in June, reaching its peak given the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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