The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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provides
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details of Yemenis and Italian
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people
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people's
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age
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life in 2000 and the estimation of citizens in 2050.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there would be a significant rise
of
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in
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people
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who
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age
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from 15 to 59 years old in both countries.
First,
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about 50
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percent
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per cent
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of
people
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who live in Yaman
was
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at
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in
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age
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the age
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range of 0 to 14,
while
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it will
decrese
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decrease
by 37
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percent
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per cent
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in 2050.
However
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, the number of
people
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at
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apply
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age
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ages
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of
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15 to 59 will dramatically increase from 46
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percent
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per cent
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to 57
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percent
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per cent
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in 2050. In
Italy
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Italy,
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the result would be similar to Yeman
while
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there will be a rise
at
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in
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number
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a number
the number
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of
people
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who
age
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from 15 to 59
form
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from
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46
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percent
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per cent
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to 61
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percent
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per cent
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and there but there will be a totally different result
at
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for
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those individuals who are more than 60 years old,
while
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only 5
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percent
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per cent
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of society were more than 60 years old in Yeman. but the number of these
age
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group
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groups
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are
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was
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more than 20
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percent
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per cent
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at
same
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the same
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time in 2000 and it will dramatically
increse
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increase
by 20
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percent
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per cent
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and will be 42
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percent
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per cent
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in 2025 in Italy. In
conclution
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conclusion
, despite the result of
population
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the population
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of Yeman and Italy,
group
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the group
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of
people
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at
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aged
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age
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of
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apply
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15 to 59 will potentially
increses
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increases
increase
till
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by
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2050 in both countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Age structure
  • Dependency ratio
  • Life expectancy
  • Birth rate
  • Socioeconomic development
  • Projections
  • Developing country
  • Developed country
  • Youthful population
  • Aged population
  • Population aging
  • Pension systems
  • Healthcare services
  • Economic conditions
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