The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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provides
details of Yemenis and Italian Change the verb form
provide
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people
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people's
age
life in 2000 and the estimation of citizens in 2050.
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Overall
, it can be seen that there would be a significant rise Linking Words
of
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in
people
who Use synonyms
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age
from 15 to 59 years old in both countries.
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aged
First,
about 50 Linking Words
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percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
who live in Yaman Use synonyms
was
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are
at
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in
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age
range of 0 to 14, Add an article
the age
an age
while
it will Linking Words
decrese
by 37 Correct your spelling
decrease
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percent
in 2050. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, the number of Linking Words
people
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at
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apply
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age
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ages
of
15 to 59 will dramatically increase from 46 Change preposition
apply
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percent
to 57 Change the spelling
per cent
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percent
in 2050.
In Change the spelling
per cent
Italy
the result would be similar to Yeman Add a comma
Italy,
while
there will be a rise Linking Words
at
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in
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
who Use synonyms
age
from 15 to 59 Use synonyms
form
46 Correct your spelling
from
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percent
to 61 Change the spelling
per cent
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percent
and there but there will be a totally different result Change the spelling
per cent
at
those individuals who are more than 60 years old, Change preposition
for
while
only 5 Linking Words
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percent
of society were more than 60 years old in Yeman. but the number of these Change the spelling
per cent
age
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group
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groups
are
more than 20 Wrong verb form
was
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percent
at Change the spelling
per cent
same
time in 2000 and it will dramatically Add an article
the same
increse
by 20 Correct your spelling
increase
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percent
and will be 42 Change the spelling
per cent
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percent
in 2025 in Italy.
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per cent
conclution
, despite the result of Correct your spelling
conclusion
population
of Yeman and Italy, Correct article usage
the population
group
of Correct article usage
the group
people
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at
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aged
age
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of
15 to 59 will potentially Change preposition
apply
increses
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increases
increase
till
2050 in both countries.Change preposition
by
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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