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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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THE MAPS
PROVIDES
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PROVIDE
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 DATA ON WHAT CHANGES WERE SUPPOSED IN
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ROAD
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THE ROAD
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 ENTRANCE TO
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CITY
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THE CITY
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 HOSPITAL IN 2007 AND 2010.
OVERALL
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,
IT IS CLEAR THAT
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 ONE OF THE MAJOR CHANGES IS ADDITION OF TWO HOSPITAL ROUNDABOUTS AND SOME FACILITIES. LOOKING
INTO
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IN
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 MORE DETAIL,
CITY
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 HOSPITAL
LOCATED
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IS LOCATED
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 IN THE HEART OF
AREA
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THE AREA
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 AND IN ORDER TO MAKE ACCESS IT
SURROUNDED
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IS SURROUNDED
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RING
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BY RING
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ROAD
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. IN 2007
CITY
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ROAD
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 AND HOSPITAL ROUNDABOUT WERE INTERSECTED. THERE SIX BUS STOPS HAD BEEN SET UP AROUND THE HOSPITAL ROUNDABOUT BY 2007. THERE
WERE
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WAS
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 A LARGE PARKING AREA FOR
STAFF
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THE STAFF
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 OF
HOSPITAL
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THE HOSPITAL
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 AND
PUBLIC
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THE PUBLIC
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. REGARDING THE NEW FACILITIES, A SIGNIFICANT BUS STATION RELOCATED TO
WESTERN
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THE WESTERN
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 CORNER OF
HOSPITAL
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THE HOSPITAL
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IT
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apply
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HAD ACCESS TO BOTH ROUNDABOUTS. UNLIKE
FROM
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IN
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 2007, PUBLIC AND STAFF CAR
PARK
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PARKS
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DIVIDED
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WERE DIVIDED
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 INTO TWO
SPEACIAL
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SPECIAL
AREA
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AREAS
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 EACH OF
THEM
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WHICH
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 HAD ACCESS TO
HOSPITAL
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THE HOSPITAL
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 .
CITY
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ROAD
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 AND RING
ROAD
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 KEPT THEIR ORIGINAL POSITION IN 2007.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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