The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar can
The diagram depicts the steps
involving
in producing white Wrong verb form
involved
sugar
from Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
Use synonyms
Sugar
canes are harvested after ripening which Use synonyms
it
takes one year to eighteen months. There are two methods of harvesting: Correct pronoun usage
apply
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first
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The first
,
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is, traditional
traditional
one that farmers cut Correct article usage
the traditional
them
by Correct pronoun usage
apply
hands
. And Fix the agreement mistake
hand
second
is using agricultural equipment Add a comma
second,
such
as Linking Words
combine
. Add an article
the combine
Then
Linking Words
while
using special machinery to Linking Words
crushing
the plant, the Wrong verb form
crush
juice
of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sugar
crane Correct article usage
the sugar
gathered
in a container by squeezing the inputs. In the next stage, a filter made with limestone is applied to purify the Add a missing verb
was gathered
juice
.
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Syrup
is the output of the next level. In an evaporator, cleaned Add an article
The syrup
juice
is boiled until the Use synonyms
juice
becomes more concentrated by losing its water and turning to the syrup. Before the final step, a centrifuge, spinning significantly, segregates Use synonyms
sugar
crystals from the syrup. Use synonyms
Finally
, Linking Words
sugar
crystals are dried and cooled and are ready for Use synonyms
the
consumption.
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apply
Overall
, the process of producing Linking Words
sugar
consists of seven steps, and a remarkable Use synonyms
afford
is required to bear the delicious good.Correct your spelling
effort
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