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the plan shows the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year

#plan #site #airport #redevelopment #year
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The illustration depicts the structure of an
airport
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 before and after a transformation.
In
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At
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 the entrance of the
airport
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, one additional door will be added to both
departure
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the departure
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 and arrival sections.
While
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 in the current
building
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building,
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 there is no ATM machine and café, these two
fasiliteis
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facilities
 will help the passengers who arrive at the
airport
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 to satisfy their needs.
Besides
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,
new comers
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newcomers
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 can rent a car from the office at the right corner of the arrival part.
However
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, in the departure
division
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division,
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 the check-in zone would be relocated in the opposite direction to the left upper corner in a way that a café and a bag drop are replaced by the check-in zone.
Moreover
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, after
security
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the security
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 and passport control area, in the new
airport
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, passengers can purchase
soveniers
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souvenirs
souveniers
 from a series of shops offering service
for
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apply
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in the middle section of the
airport
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. A significant expansion is observed in the number of gates
in
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on
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 both sides.
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 the old
airport
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 has two
walkaways
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walkways
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, they are substituted by two modern sky
train
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trains
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 in order to facilitate
passengers
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passengers'
passenger's
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 transportation.
Overall
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, Several infrastructures will be attached to the
airport
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, but the most notable one is the alteration of the gates.
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly to enhance logical flow. Group similar points together and use linking words effectively to show the relationship between different parts of your description.
task achievement
Ensure all main points are well-supported with specific examples or details related to the plan. This will strengthen your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Consider providing a clear conclusion that summarizes the main differences or most important changes highlighted in your essay.
task achievement
You effectively describe the additions and changes, such as the new café, ATM, and sky train, demonstrating a good understanding of the redevelopment plans.
coherence cohesion
The essay is structured with an introduction that sets the context followed by a detailed comparison.
language use
You make good use of vocabulary related to location and change, such as "relocated," "replaced," and "substituted," which enhances the clarity of your writing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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