The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development.
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THE MAPS COMPARE THE CURRENT LAYOUT WITH THE PLANNED RENOVATIONS OF ISLIP TOWN.
OVERALL
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IT IS CLEAR THAT
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ONE MAJOR RENOVATION WILL BE
ADDITION
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THE ADDITION
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OF A DUAL CARRIAGEWAY WITH
SEVRAL
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SEVERAL
NEW FACILITIES. LOOKING INTO MORE DETAIL, THERE IS
MAIN
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A MAIN
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ROAD
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IN THE
HEAR
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HEART
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OF THE TOWN AND IT IS SURROUNDED
WITH
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BY
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SHOPS.
PARK
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THE PARK
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HAS AN ENTRANCE TO
MAIN
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THE MAIN
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ROAD
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AND
SCHOOL
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THE SCHOOL
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IS LOCATED IN CLOSE PROXIMITY TO
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ROAD
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THE ROAD
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. TURNING TO PLANNED CHANGES, ONE OF THE SIGNIFICANT DEVELOPMENT IS CONSTRUCTION OF DUAL CARRIAGEWAY AROUND THE CITY. THE MAIN
ROAD
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WILL BE REMOVED IN ORDER TO OPEN UP A SPACE FOR PEDESTERIANS
ROAD
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. SHOPS ARE SET TO KEEP
ITS
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THEIR
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ORIGINAL POSITION, AND TWO NEW HOUSINGS ARE PLANNED TO CONSTRUCT. ABOVE THE
PEDESTERIANS
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PEDESTRIANS
ROAD
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BUS STATION, SHOPPING CENTRE AND CAR PARK WILL BE CONSTRUCTED. SCHOOL AND ONE HOUSING AREA WILL BE LOCATED OUT OF THE DUAL CARRIAGEWAY.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Redevelopment
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrianization
  • Residential area
  • Landscaping
  • Community impact
  • Public transport
  • Commercial zone
  • Environmental footprint
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