Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor Do think this is a positive or negative development?

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citizens

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consider

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issue that doctors have spent many years of their life for studying at university and actually passing many technical lessons. So

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who does not

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proficiency

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treating

others

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or himself,

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apply

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may endanger

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others

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health.

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, a woman is complaining about some pain around her chest and her son comes and takes her some Codeines. But maybe it is a sign of

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a heart-attack

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and he has

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easily. Even

citizens

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should visit a doctor for

checkup

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from time to time. Maybe they have vitamin deficiency or do not have had.

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if they consume

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which their

body

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not need it, leads to health problems.

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citizens

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should consider

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issue, Having knowledge about medicine dosage is very important and it depends on many factors like age, weight, height and gender.

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, when infants catch a cold and have a fever, when a doctor visits them, first check their weight and

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advise how to consume a drop. If we use it more, it will be harmful. The

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of the old generation definitely varies against the

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of the young generation. Actually, a knowledgeable expert can dosage medicine for

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. In conclusion, it is so narrow-minded that usual

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advice to

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or use medicine without any efficiency. The best way to solve any problems is

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help from skilled people. We should love our

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and take time for it so that we can show

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point by visiting a doctor.

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Ensure to provide clear, relevant specific examples that directly support your main points. For instance, examples of alternative medicine practices and their effects could strengthen your argument.

coherence cohesion

Try to organize your essay with clear logical connections between your points to improve the flow and structure. Use linking words such as 'however', 'moreover', and 'therefore' more effectively.

coherence cohesion

You have structured your response with an introduction and a conclusion, making your main argument clear from the beginning.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

257 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
access
personalized approach
holistic well-being
lack of regulation
evidence-based research
proper medical treatment

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor Do think this is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this? How could more people be encouraged to come into the teaching profession?

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people going to universities. Others argue that it only leads to a higher unemployment rate. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.