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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

#change #price #three #metals #information #features #comparisons
The provided line graph illustrates the data about the percentage of average
price
change
 of Copper, Nickel, and
Zink
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Zinc
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 in
one
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a
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year
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one-year
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 period in 2014.
Overall
, the trend of Nickel
price
change
 has decreased,
while
 Copper
price
 fluctuated but
at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 it was settled
as
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at
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 the same amount when
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 started.
In contrast
, the
change
 of Zink
price
 inclined in small percentage
at the end
 of
year
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the year
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. When considering Nickle, the
price
change
compare
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compared
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 to
previous
Correct article usage
the previous
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 month, drastically dropped from January to March
the
Correct article usage
a
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 slight decline in
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 two months but it plummeted
its
Change preposition
to its
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 lowest at -
3
Correct your spelling
-3
% in June. The trend for
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 six months
was fluctuated
Change to the active voice
fluctuated
has fluctuated
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 but it was
upward
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an upward
the upward
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 trend and
end
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ended
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 at 1% in December. Zink had inclined its
price
diffrence
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difference
 from January to February
then
gradual decline
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gradually declined
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 til June and reached the mean
percentages
Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
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 of 1%.
Then
 it
had
Verb problem
went
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 up and down
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 6 months,
finally
reached
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reaching
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near
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nearly
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 2% in December. Copper
price
 had
relatively
Correct article usage
a relatively
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 small drop
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from
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fro
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from
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 January to June
then
 gradually increased
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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price
 and settled around the same value, at around 2%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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