The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the data about the percentage of average
price
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change
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of Copper, Nickel, and
Zink
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Zinc
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in
one
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a
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year
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one-year
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period in 2014.
Overall
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, the trend of Nickel
price
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change
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has decreased,
while
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Copper
price
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fluctuated but
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at
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in
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the
end
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end,
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it was settled
as
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at
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the same amount when
years
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the years
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started.
In contrast
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, the
change
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of Zink
price
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inclined in small percentage
at the end
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of
year
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the year
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. When considering Nickle, the
price
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change
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compare
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compared
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to
previous
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the previous
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month, drastically dropped from January to March
the
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a
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slight decline in
next
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the next
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two months but it plummeted
its
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to its
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lowest at -
3
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-3
% in June. The trend for
next
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the next
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six months
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
has fluctuated
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but it was
upward
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an upward
the upward
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trend and
end
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ended
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at 1% in December. Zink had inclined its
price
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diffrence
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difference
from January to February
then
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gradual decline
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gradually declined
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til June and reached the mean
percentages
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percentage
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of 1%.
Then
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it
had
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went
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up and down
next
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the next
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6 months,
finally
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reached
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reaching
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near
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nearly
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2% in December. Copper
price
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had
relatively
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a relatively
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small drop
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from
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fro
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from
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January to June
then
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gradually increased
its
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apply
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price
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and settled around the same value, at around 2%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, change with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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