The map below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map above depicts the current condition of Islip town centre and its future development.
Overall
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, it can be seen that on the first map, there is a dead end, but the planned development shows the
road
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become dual in the future. Not only that
,
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but
also
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there are some new facilities.
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with, school
is
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still remain
on
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its position. Meanwhile,
first
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the first
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housing
have
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to
slightly
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be slightly
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moved to another site because of the
road
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while
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the other one will be located inside of dual
carriageaway
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carriageway
.
Besides
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that, the size of
park
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the park
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will be smaller for the construction of the
road
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.
Furthermore
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, there will be no countryside as it
used
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is used
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for expanding the
road
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. Now,
main
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road
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is
flanking
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flanked
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with
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by
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two shops.
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, on the plan map, the shop will reduced and
main
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the main
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road
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only can be used for pedestrians. The area for
shop
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the shop
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will be added new places,
such
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as
bus
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a bus
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station, shopping centre, car park, and two new housing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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