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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure given illustrates
about
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the average monthly changes in
prices
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 of three metals including Copper, Nickel and
Zinc
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 in 2014.
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, it is evident that
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although
 all figures experienced
a
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flucuated
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fluctuated
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in
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this
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 year, Nickel was known as
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 most
dramaticall
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dramatic
dramatically
 ups and downs trend in 2014.
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 with, decreasing
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from
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 2
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percent
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per cent
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 to approximately -1
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percent
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 in May
in
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Copper
prices
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 changes
is
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dramatically.
However
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 its price experienced a bit of rise in July reaching
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1
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percent
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per cent
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 changes, it remained stable until September
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 reached nearly 2
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percent
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at the end
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 of the year.
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,
Zinc
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 and nickel
prices
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 started at 1 and 6
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percent
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 respectively.
While
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Zinc
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 price climbed
at
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top
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the top
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 of 3
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percent
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 in the next month,
Nickle
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Nickel
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 price plunged
into
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by
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 1
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percent
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.
Finally
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 ,by
flactuating
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fluctuating
experiences for both
Zinc
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 and
Nickle
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Nickel
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prices
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, they reached
at
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2 and 1
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percent
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per cent
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respectivelly
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respectively
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, zinc, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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