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The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now.

#maps #show #changes #city
The maps
provides
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provide
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 new constructions which changed from 1950 to the present. At first glance , it is explicit that
city
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the city
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 experienced major expansion mainly residential
area
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areas
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.
In addition
, another noticeable change is
lake
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a lake
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 which
passed
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passes
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cross
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across
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 the road. Looking at the details, in 1950
urban
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the urban
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area
's inhabitants
was
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were
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 20.000.
In the
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The
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 top middle of the
mao
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Mao
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 which located business district and
northern
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the northern
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 part
in
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is
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 the
headquarters owned
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headquarters-owned
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 residential
area
.
As well as
,
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apply
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roads have been a way
in
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on
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 4 sides of the map.
Bridge
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A bridge
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and small governmental
building
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buildings
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located
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are located
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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outward of the river.
Additionally
, in the southeast near the river and crossed the road
have
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apply
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been
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is
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 located Airport
center
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centre
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. At
the
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apply
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present ,
th
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the
 population rapidly increased by 180 since an extension was recorded that the residential
area
fully
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is fully
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 surrounded
that
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by
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 the business district and government building. Meanwhile,
in
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apply
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the midpoint which placed
business
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the business
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center
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centre
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was build
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was built
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the
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in the
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 direction
to
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of
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lake
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the lake
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as well as
 exterior of the major road was constructed bridges for residents. In the southeast of the city lake's water was
chokked
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choked
chocked
checked
by
dam
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a dam
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also
 miniaturized for making
expansion
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an expansion
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airport
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of airport
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building
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buildings
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.
Moreover
, roads
developed
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were developed
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 to
make
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provide
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 assistance by cars
aslo
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and
 residents.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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