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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited -Describe where you stayed and what you can do there -Provide one negative aspect about the destination -Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. -Begin your letter as follows: -Dear _____,

#friend #holiday #destination #-recommend #place #-describe #-provide #aspect #-write #addresses #-begin #-dear #_____
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Dear Rachel, I have not heard from you in a
while
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. How are you? I would be happy to share my recommendations for your next holiday, especially regarding my recent trip to
Hoi
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 An. I think you will be as charmed by it as I was
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 My husband and I visited
Hoi
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last
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 September to celebrate our 17th wedding anniversary,
where
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which
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 is about 30 km from Da Nang
city
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City
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. We stayed at Muca, a modest but well-equipped resort within a
10 minute
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10-minute
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 bike ride from the
town
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 center. For our 17th wedding anniversary in September, my husband and I went to
Hoi
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 An. About 30 km from Da Nang city is
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 An, which is known for its well-preserved old
town
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. Our hotel, Muca, was small but well-equipped. It was a 10-minute bike ride to the
town
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center
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. It's interesting that you can only walk in the
town
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's streets. The wooden houses and old churches here are a mix of Japanese, Chinese, and Vietnamese styles.
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, the Japanese Covered Bridge and the old Chinese guild halls are beautiful.
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 that, the food here is really unique; you can try Cao Lau, My Quang, and other street foods. Most of the people here speak English, so you don't have to worry about being able to talk to them. If you have time, I think you should book a tour to go to craft towns where people grow vegetables and make pottery. I'm sure you'll have fun there. For real, four days in
Hoi
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 An are not enough for me. I will come back on my next trip. Hope you enjoy hearing me, and I look forward to hearing you. Your lovingly, Trang Dao
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Coherence
To enhance coherence, try to avoid repetitive phrases to maintain a smooth flow throughout your writing.
Cohesion
Be sure to include all necessary details in one section before moving to another; this makes it easy for the reader to follow your description.
Task Achievement
Successfully provided a detailed description of the recommended destination, including where you stayed and activities to do.
Writing Tone
Maintained a friendly and conversational tone throughout the letter, suitable for a letter to a friend.
Greeting and Closing
The letter starts and ends with appropriate greetings and closings, making it feel personal and complete.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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