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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates how
Ashdown
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Museum
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 was visited by how many
people
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 after and before refurbishment. The given pie charts demonstrate how much the visitor was satisfied in two years.
Overall
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, the total number of visitors to the
Ashdown
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Museum
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 increased in the timeframe.
Also
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, the result of the survey shows the share of
people
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 who were satisfied and very satisfied increased in the timespan.
However
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, the percentage of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied decreased in the same trajectory. It is clearly seen that the
Ashdown
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Museum
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 was visited by 74000
people
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 before refurbishment.
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, after the
Ashdown
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Museum
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 was refurbished, the number of visitors rose to 92000. It is obvious that the proportion of
people
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 who the satisfied and very satisfied were 30 and 15 percent, respectively.
Then
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 it increased to 35 and 45 per cent after refurbishment. But, the share of the dissatisfied and very dissatisfied was 40 and 10 per cent, respectively.
Subsequently
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, it decreased to 15 and 5 percent.
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