Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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Improve clarity by organizing ideas in a more logical order, breaking down complex sentences, and using clearer transitions between points.
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Ensure each paragraph fully develops an idea, with examples that directly relate to the main point of the paragraph.
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Balance the coverage of both advantages and disadvantages; currently, the focus seems more on the disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and recognizable, with a stated position.
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The essay attempts to address the task by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of social media use.
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Some relevant examples are provided, like the story about a cousin's social media usage affecting his health.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...