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Sources of electricity in four countries 2003-2008.

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The pie chart illustrates a variety of sources of
electricity
 which were used in four different countries during 2003 and 2008.
Overall
, there were three types of resources of electroenergy. Fossil fuels were the dominant source in
India
 and Vietnam with 81.9% and 56.3% respectively. Usage of
this
 material showed nearly numbers in
Sweden
 and Morocco.
While
 in
Sweden
 it is used for 4% of
electricity
, in Morocco the deal was quite higher, 4,5%. The most popular source was Hydropower which was used for creating nearly full
electricity
 in Morocco, 95.5%.The second country in which hydropower
widespread
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 most was
Sweden
 with 52%. After
Sweden
 high numbers belonged to Vietnam, 43.7%. The lowest results were demonstrated in
India
.
This
 resource is used for only 14.6 per cent of
electricity
 in
India
. Les popular source which was used only in one country is nuclear power.
This
 energy resource is used only in
India
 in a small amount, 3.5%.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay provides a clear overview of the main sources of electricity in the specified countries, including some comparative insights. However, it would benefit from a stronger, cohesive introduction and conclusion to clearly outline and summarize the main points.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the paragraphs more clearly, for example by grouping the countries that have similar electricity sources. This will help enhance the logical flow and make it easier for readers to follow your analysis.
task achievement
Your essay discusses the percentages accurately, but to improve further, you could provide a bit more context or reason on why certain countries might prefer one energy source over the others, if possible, for a more nuanced analysis.
coherence cohesion
Include more varied linking words to better connect your ideas, which can strengthen the overall coherence of your response.
task achievement
You provided a clear overview of the primary energy sources in each country, which is integral to task response.
task achievement
The comparative analysis between countries, especially in terms of percentages, adds depth to your response.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the data presented in the pie chart and communicates the main points effectively.

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