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Some people claim that students should take short-term gap after their study but other people says that its should not be. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #gap #study
There is no denying the fact that during study
students
 feel pressure with their hectic
sechdules
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schedules
.
Therefore
, some people encourage
students
 to take
short-term
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a short-term
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gap
 after their graduation,
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but there
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also
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is also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I'm convinced that
short-term
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a short-term
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gap
 is not
a
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practical
advise
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 for fresh
graduate
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graduates
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.
To begin
 with, people who
claimed
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claim
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 that
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the shor-term
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shor-term
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short-term
gap
 is beneficial for
students
believe
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to believe
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 that
this
 term will
assest
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assist
 them
to explore
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in exploring
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 their dreams.
In other words
, in that short-term
students
 will analyse their choices and plans in order to
decied
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decide
decided
 what they will do in
thier
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their
 lives.
In addition
,
students
'
last
 year
involve
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 a hectic
sechdule
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schedule
, so taking a short-term
gap
 will make them feel relief.
For example
, they can utilize that
gap
 with
thier
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their
famlies
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families
 or their friends. Another point to consider is that some studies have proven that taking a short-term
gap
 after graduation will
leave
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have
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 an adverse
affect
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effect
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. It is
also
 possible to say that,
students
 may stop their education
after
this
gap
 because they may forget their dreams.
Moreover
, taking
this
gap
 will make their
journy
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journey
 longer. In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I tend to believe that
students
 must be dedicated in order to
achive thier
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achieve their
 dreams,
however
, if they
felt
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feel
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 that pressure is upon their limit, taking a short-term
gab
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gap
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 in
this
 situation would be beneficial.
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