Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

Many older
people
suggest that children should study
history
, ensuring that the future generation will not attempt to
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the same mistakes
while
some
people
encourage others to focus on
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rather than prioritize the past. From my perspective, both approaches hold merit, and achieving
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between them is essential. On the one hand, it is
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that these days the educational system has made
history
into memorized subjects, neglecting the true
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purpose
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of
this
subject.
For instance
, teachers in many Thai schools force their students to remember the former Thai rulers' names in chronological order or remember the past conflict in detail without analyzing the cause.
This
lesson does not offer advantages to young
people
and only results in overlooking the intrinsic value of
this
subject.
Additionally
, opponents of learning
history
point out that
people
should emphasize the importance of
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which can be changed based on our actions
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today
compared to the undone past.
On the other hand
, there are strong arguments
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the necessity of
history
.
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humans' behaviours and mistakes can prevent
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to occur
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again.
For example
, analyzing the root causes of
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I and II definitely has the potential to prohibit another world war.
People
can learn from
history
that the adverse outcomes of these wars were tremendously dreadful, as they
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to millions of
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and
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stagnant economic growth. In conclusion, learning
history
contributes to the vital knowledge which can prevent the same mistaken actions.
However
, schools should emphasize teachers
to
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provide lessons in the proper way, enabling the true worth of
this
subject.
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing ideas into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and connecting using linking words to improve the flow.
task achievement
Discuss both viewpoints in equal depth and ensure the opinion is clearly stated and elaborated.
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Further elaborate on specific historical examples to strengthen the argument for the importance of history.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents the two opposing views and provides a balanced perspective.
task achievement
The essay makes an effort to support the views with examples such as the teaching of Thai history and the world wars.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the writer's perspective, emphasizing the importance of teaching history properly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • anachronistic
  • cultural heritage
  • perspective
  • historical context
  • societal norms
  • contemporary
  • evolution
  • progress
  • modern advancements
  • conflicts
  • tensions
  • academic
  • practical skills
  • subjective
  • victors
  • marginalized groups
  • dwelling on the past
  • irrelevant
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