OUR ASSIGNMENT👇: You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: 1) Explain when and how long you will be in town. 2) Ask whether you can stay at their home. 3)Offer to pay for yourself.

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Dear Raam, Hi Raam, I hope you and your family will be well. I'm writing

this

letter about

visit

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your city.

Firstly

, I and my

frieds

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friends

have

planed

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planned

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to visit your city for one of my

reserge

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research

work.

last

month

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told you

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have one of work in your city.

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are

three

person

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will come on 2nd

december

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December

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2024. I

have

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apply

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plan to stay

three

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for three

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days.

Moreover

, I

have

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apply

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plan to stay book the

hotel

. I don't know your area hotels. which

hotel

best

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hotel

. tell me

about

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apply

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thougt

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thought

. If

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come

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apply

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only

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will

be stay

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be staying

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your home but we are

three

come

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coming

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.If you have any convenient tell me. we will come and stay

your

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at your

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home. If we come we can

fun

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have fun

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these

three

days.

Lastly

, If you arrange your home to stay and food. we will pay for all

arrangment

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arrangement

arrangements

. when we go to

hotel

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the hotel

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they will get more money from us. so you can get it. I will expect your reply soon. Lovely Fried. Kuus

Sun Nov 24 2024

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Structure

Consider splitting different ideas into separate paragraphs. For example, the reasoning for going should be separate from the accommodation discussion.

Information

Provide a more detailed timeline for the stay to add clarity.

Paragraph focus

Though generally well-structured, ensure each paragraph focuses primarily on one main idea, enhancing coherence.

Tone

The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and warm, which suits the tone of a letter to a relative.

Clarity in Task

The writer clearly expresses the purpose of the visit and includes an offer to contribute financially.

Tone

Friendly and casual writing style fits well for communication with a relative.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

175 words

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*OUR ASSIGNMENT*👇: You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: 1) Explain when and how long you will be in town. 2) Ask whether you can stay at their home. 3)Offer to pay for yourself.

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