Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that local attractions
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museum
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and historical sites are usually visited by outsiders and not residents. The primary reason for
this
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is that local people are usually unaware of them and are busy, and the main solution is the publicity campaign. The
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reason for
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population not visiting
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museums
and historical places is that people are usually unaware of them. They do not have any idea what these attractions can offer.
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these places are not promoted in ads or in TV commercials.
On the other hand
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, the tourist usually get to know about them through travel
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and they are usually
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part of their travel package.
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, almost 90% of the international travel
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available on the
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include visits to
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of places. The most viable solution to the
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problem is the public awareness
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campaign
. If enough
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knowledge
is provided to the local people through print media and
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and through
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educational institutions public will come to know about them and most likely will visit them.
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, in
Japan
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Japan,
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a local town had run a
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similar
campaign focusing mainly on its resident and
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not only the attendance of local folks
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at
thaier
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their
historical sites but their revenue
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swelled. In conclusion, the main reason for historical attractions to be visited by foreigners is the lack of knowledge and interest among the residents and the most viable
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solution
is a publicity campaign targeting the local audience and educational institutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • tourist attractions
  • interactive exhibits
  • perception
  • civic pride
  • engagement
  • community outreach
  • curate
  • cultural institutions
  • historical significance
  • sustainable tourism
  • resident benefits
  • local patronage
  • preserve
  • educational initiatives
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