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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table
give
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gives
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 information about the
price
 of
water
 for two categories of consumers who use less than 125
killolitres
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kilolitres
, and those who consume more than 125KL , for five
cities
 in Australia.
Moreover
, the average bill per
hausehold
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household
, in these
cities
, is shown in another column.
To begin
 with, in the
first
 group, with usage up to 125KL,
Adelaid
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Adelaide
 and Perth have the lowest
price
, 0.42 dollars. Compared to other
cities
, people in Sydney who fall in the
first
 category, pay more for a litre of
water
, $0.98.
Price
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The price
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 in Brisbane is marginally more than
Melbourne
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in Melbourne
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, with 3 cents more, it is $.81. Interestingly, people using more than 125KL in Sydney, pay the same
price
;
moreover
, there is no
price
differenciation
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differentiation
 for Melbourn.
However
,
while
 Pert and
Adelaid
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Adelaide
 are the cheapest
cities
 for those in the
first
 group, these
cities
 are the most expensive
one
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ones
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 for
who
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those who
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 are not
fruigal
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frugal
 with
water
. dwellers in Adelaid and Pert Have to be charged $1.00 and 1.5 dollars per
killolitres
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kilolitres
 when
they
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their
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consomption
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consumption
exceed
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exceeds
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 125KL.
Finally
,
water
 pricing is moderate,
same
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the same
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 as the
first
 category, in Brisbane, with only three cents higher, it is 0.84 dollars.
in addition
,
in
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on
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 average, people pay more than others for their
water
 bills,
whereas
,
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, water, kl, cities, first with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost
  • water consumption
  • billing method
  • variation
  • historical trends
  • outlier
  • price range
  • anomalies
  • regional factor
  • summarise
  • identify
  • compare
  • expensive
  • least expensive
  • main features
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