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The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students.

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The given
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 presents the steps required to complete the requirements for
work
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 experience of
the
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university students. As is presented in the
flowchart
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, there are six steps involved in fulfilling the requirements starting from the Application submission till submitting the final
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 and after a
student
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 successfully
complete
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 these steps, s/he would be awarded the necessary credits. As is presented in the
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, the first
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 of the process is called ‘Application’
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 requires a
student
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 to choose a suitable and potential workspace and to arrange the interview to submit the application in the fields s/he is interested in. The next
step
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 involves the approval stage where a
student
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 needs to be accepted and
then
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 s/he needs to submit the acceptance letter to a professor for approval. After that, the
student
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 is required to make a schedule to
work
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 for more than 10 hours per week for more than 20 weeks. In the fourth stage, the candidate has to fulfil the weekly
work
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report
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 and submit
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 the corresponding professor each Friday. In the Evaluation
step
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, the candidate will participate in the evaluation meeting in the final week of his/ her
work
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 with the
work
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 supervisor and the supervisor
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 submit the evaluation form. In the final
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, known as ‘Final
Report
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’, the candidate has to submit the final
report
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 before the
last
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 week of
spring
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 semester.
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 the submission of
final
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the final
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report
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, the
work
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 experience requirements are fulfilled
according to
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 the process described in the
flowchart
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.
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, consider providing clearer distinctions between the different stages. For example, you could specify examples of potential workspaces or types of reports, which can enrich the essay with relevant specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining sentence transitions to ensure even smoother flow between the sections. This can be achieved by using more varied linking words and phrases.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction provides a clear and concise overview of the process described in the flowchart.
logical structure
The essay demonstrates a logical structure by following the sequence of steps in the flowchart and detailing each stage.
supported main points
Each step in the flowchart is well explained and the use of temporal phrases ensures smooth transition between steps.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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