Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?”
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world
become a global village where individual
can share Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
same
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the same
interest
in terms of fashion. Regardless of their residence, they can buy anything they want around the Fix the agreement mistake
interests
world
. In my prospective
, Correct your spelling
perspective
this
trend has more
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a more
negetive impect
on Correct your spelling
negative impact
countries
than postive
.
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positive
Firstly
, availability
of every product at all Correct article usage
the availability
place
will Fix the agreement mistake
places
leads
to Change the verb form
lead
reduction
in tourism which is Add an article
a reduction
main
source of Change the article
the main
earning
in some famous travelling Correct your spelling
earnings
country
. Fix the agreement mistake
countries
For example
, some people travel to Italy just to taste richness
of Italian food. Add an article
the richness
However
, these day
Italian Fix the agreement mistake
days
cuisin
can be found Correct your spelling
cuisine
most
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in most
of
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apply
the
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apply
countries
. Even, locals in foreign countries
can prepare authentic italian
food so people can Change the capitalization
Italian
fulfill
their Change the spelling
fulfil
crave
without leaving their country.
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cravings
In addition
, the accessibility of some products in entire
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the entire
world
can leads
to cultural loss as some products are unique and serve as Change the verb form
lead
a
important part of Change the article
an
specific
culture. Add an article
a specific
the specific
For instance
, people from India use
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Indian
attire on daily
basis Correct article usage
a daily
form
many years. But, now Correct your spelling
for
youngstar
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Youngstar
prefer
to wear Correct subject-verb agreement
prefers
western
clothes as comfortable attire Capitalize word
Western
ratherthan
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rather than
Indian
clothes. This
replacement could be the reason behind Correct article usage
the lost
lost
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loss
Indian
cultural dress. Change preposition
of Indian
Also
, local seller
who are only selling Fix the agreement mistake
sellers
Indian
clothes could face bankrupcy
in future Correct your spelling
bankruptcy
as well as
Indian
dresses are losing there
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their
values
.
In conclusion, it can be said that with Fix the agreement mistake
value
this
trend countries
can experince
negative Correct your spelling
experience
experience
. For one thing, it can be a threat towards cultural value in an individuality and can Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
effect
tourism in the Correct your spelling
affect
world
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on improving logical flow and transitioning between ideas for greater clarity.
Task Achievement
Clarify and elaborate on ideas to make them more comprehensive and less ambiguous.
Language Use
Try using a wider range of vocabulary and more complex sentence structures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument effectively.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the prompt by discussing both positive and negative aspects.
Task Achievement
Good use of examples to support the points made, such as the impact on tourism and cultural changes.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.