Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Nowadays it is a common trend to introduce
the
multinational Correct article usage
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brands
in third world
countries. Add a hyphen
third-world
This
essay will discuss the benefits as well as
drawbacks of these initiatives with examples.
Starting a multinational business in a state has several advanatges
. First of Correct your spelling
advantages
all
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all,
people
can have easy access to international brands
of their own choices
in their cities. In Fix the agreement mistake
choice
this
way
they do not need to spend a lot of money to go abroad and do Add a comma
way,
thier shoping
. For Correct your spelling
their shopping
examle
, to buy Gucci bags and other branded Correct your spelling
example
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
some time
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sometimes
people
of Pakistan had to visit Duabi
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Dubai
that
required high costs. But nowadays we can buy these Correct pronoun usage
which
products
easily in Karachi without visiting any other country. Furthermore
, The
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interantional
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international
companies
bring huge investments
, when they start their business oulets
in economically weak countries. In Correct your spelling
outlets
this
way
foreign Add a comma
way,
investments
strengthen the
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such
country’s
economy. Correct article usage
a country’s
For instance
, India’s economy boosted exponentially with arrival
of several foreign Add an article
the arrival
investments
.
On the other hand
, there are several negative impacts of these multinational companies
on local products
. The most noticeable disadvantage is decrease
in Correct article usage
a decrease
sale
of local Add an article
the sale
products
which destroys the local markets. For instance
, in Pakistan
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Pakistan,
products
reached to
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due to
international brands
like BATA which attract the public more.
Additionally
, compared to local products
these brands
are very costly and only rich persons can buy these producs
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products
while
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the majority
a majority
public
can not afford to buy these things. In Add an article
the public
this
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way,
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people
develop sense
of poverty which results in polarization in these societies.
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a sense
although
foreign companies
bring good quality products
and investments
to developing countries which boost their economy, but
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companies
also
destroy the
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business
and develop Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
the
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people
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