The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Generally speaking, it is evident that there were more movies produced than
ticket's
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tickets
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sold for those
films
in both 1996 and 2006. In 1996 there were produced about 26% of
films
in
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were in
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drama
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the drama
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category,
however
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however,
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in
2006
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2006,
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this
number jumped up to 35%
this
follows for the rest of the movies
such
as
comedy's
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comedies
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and
fantasy's
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fantasies
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with the only exception being romance
films
which stayed at 7% for both 1996 and 2006.
This
can be explained by the cinema
ticket
sales, which show that general interest in romance
films
decreased over the years and is at
it's
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its
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downfall in 2006 by
aproximatlly
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approximately
3% compared to 5% in 1996.
Generlly
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Generally
speaking the graph for
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the precentage
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precentage
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percentage
of cinema
ticket
sales is very similar to the graph
of
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for
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film's
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films
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released with the only difference in the twofold of
procentage
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percentage
in
the
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apply
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ticket
sales,
also
the amount of comedy
movie's
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movies
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which shows the high interest
for
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of
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costumers
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customers
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in comedy
films
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ticket, films with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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