The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
First,
the diagrams illustrate the main differences in the same Library after twenty years, comparing it is clear that
the main characteristics that have changed are: more comfortable and clearer spaces, improved
technology in its facilities.
Correct word choice
and improved
Then
, nowadays places are clearer than in the past, with modern spaces without excessive furniture, Rephrase
Nowadays
as well as
spaces designed to offer well-being to clients, for
example
the cafeteria room, sofas in different rooms or the computer room.
Add the comma(s)
example,
Overall
, technology is currently more important and used than in previous years, as a
result
customer service is more efficient and faster than the Central Library 20 years ago, including self-service machines for purchasing tickets or returning books.
Add the comma(s)
result,
To sum up
, the differences are very notable, mainly in comfort and customer service.Submitted by fetani on
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