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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summaries information by selecting and Reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summaries information by selecting and Reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of
energy
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 use in Australian households and the figure for greenhouse gas
emissions
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 resulting from
this
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energy
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 consumption. It is observed that
while
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 heating is a dominant proportion in terms of
energy
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 usage, its impact on greenhouse gas
emissions
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 is dramatically low.
Conversely
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, water heating and other appliances have a significantly high impact on
emissions
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 unless they are using less
energy
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.
Overall
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, it is observed that heating accounts for the largest portion of
energy
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 use, at 42 %/followed by water heating at 30%.
Furthermore
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, the figure for other appliances is 15%,
while
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 refrigeration, lighting, and cooling account for 7%, 4%, and 2%, respectively. It is worth noting that even though heating is the most
energy
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-demanding activity among Australians, it only emits 15% of planthouse gases in
this
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 country.
Moreover
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, water heating is the largest contributor to pollutant
emissions
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, at 32%.
On the other hand
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, other appliances generate 28% of greenhouse gases.
Also
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, with regards to the chart, refrigeration produces 14%, followed by lighting and cooling at 8% and 3%, respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average Australian household
  • energy consumption
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • heating
  • cooling
  • water heating
  • refrigeration
  • lighting
  • cooking
  • energy use
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • emission levels
  • comparison
  • energy sector
  • household energy usage
  • environmental impact
  • energy source
  • appliance energy use
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