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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#bar #media #people #age #groups #news #country #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart provides key information about
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how
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 people of different
age
groubs
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groups
 used the media to get daily news in one country in 2022. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Radio had
a
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 highest result in
age
groupes
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groups
 (18-9 and 30-49, 50-64), around 97 per cent.
wheareas
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whereas
micro blogging
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 was
a
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 lowest result in
age
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the age
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groupe
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group
 (65), nearly 5%.
According to
 what is shown, people in ages
grope
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10-17 years prefer using
the
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apply
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social networks
than
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over
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the
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other radio or micro
blogginig
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blogging
 in media.
In contrast
, people in
age
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the age
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groupe
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group
65
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of 65
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 was not like the social networks, at nearly 10 per cent. In terms of middle
age
 groups from 18 to 64 years, the radio was the highest
while
the
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micro blogging
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micro-blogging
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 was the lowest.
Moreover
, in
age
 groups from 10 to 29 ,the social networks
was
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a
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at a
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moderate rate compared to the other
age
 groups, at
aroundly
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around
, 80%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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