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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given table illustrates information about
number
 of foreign
workers
 working in 4 different countries in 2003 and 2006. The table contains 4 columns and one of them provides details on
number
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a number
the number
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 of
workers
 per 1000
people
 in 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that
number
 of
non local
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non-local
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workers
 has
incresed
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increased
 over
this
 period in all 4 countries. The United States has the highest
number
 of migrant
workers
 in 2003 and 2006 compared to other countries
while
 New Zealand has the lowest
number
. In The United
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States
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State
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State,
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 577.000
of
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temporary migrant
workers
 got
job
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a job
the job
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 in 2003
while
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and
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this
number
has
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apply
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increased to 678.000 in 2006
However
, with 2.3
number of
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apply
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people
 per 1000
workers
 the United States has the lowest
number
 of migrant
workers
whereas
, New Zealand stand
in
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apply
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first place followed by Australia in
secound
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second
 place and the United Kingdom in third place. It is interesting that the total
number
 of
people
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got
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migrated
in
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to
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 New Zealand has just risen
up
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apply
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to 20,000 in 3 years
people
 but the total
number
 of
people
 per 1000
people
 was the highest
number
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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