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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 barriers are the most common issue of people who want to live overseas
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 is because of social and practical difficulties. That's why most foreign countries require an individual to undergo a certain
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 evaluation or training to remove themselves from isolation and discrimination. I completely agree with
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 notion and will discuss it in
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 essay. To start, people are aware that, in order to survive living overseas they need to be very conversant so they would not have to isolate themselves and gain a stable
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 in their chosen destination.
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, one of the common ways is by taking
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 test, which is common for migrants and international students in American and European countries.
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,
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 process has been used in visa screening of an individual, wherein the immigration officer would ask a series of questions to determine their level of communication, in that way, they will know if they have the capacity to start their new
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 away from their home. Since
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 they will have to interact with other people in their daily
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,
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 as classmates at school, colleagues in the workplace, going to the
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, dining in a restaurant and knowing their future neighbours.
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, in order to adapt
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 abroad, an individual will need to look for a job, but having difficulty communicating with others is an issue. In fact, if the person is not confident attending the interview process they would end up not getting the job.
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, leading to unemployment and discrimination. Aside from that, if in case they are working in a company in an Arab country
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, and they see themselves growing with
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 company, others may think of pursuing a promotion. Since
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 there are other employees who are bilingual,
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 where discrimination comes in, companies would prefer them because of their better
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 qualification and the company would benefit more. Even if, that person does not have the experience but only the
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 advantage. In conclusion, speaking a foreign
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 is very important when living in another country as it will help the person to grow and have a stable
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 overseas. Not adapting and keeping themselves isolated can cause stress which beats the purpose of trying to live a
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 in a different country.

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Ensure that each main point is fully developed with clear and comprehensive ideas. Consider providing more detailed examples or explanations to support your arguments.
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The essay addresses the task response clearly by discussing the important role of language proficiency in mitigating social and practical issues.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured essay with a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively presents and summarizes the main points.
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The examples relating to immigration, job interviews, and workplace dynamics successfully demonstrate the practical and social challenges faced by non-native speakers.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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