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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of
money
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, which four countries invested in renewable
sources
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 of
energy
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 between 1975 and 2000.
Although
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 at the beginning, all countries put the same negligible amount of
money
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for
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into
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 developing renewable
energy
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sources
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, Spain spent much more than others afterwards. Having
an
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a
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 steep increase for the first five years, it reached
to
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apply
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2
dollars
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 per person in 1980;
then
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 with a moderate upward trend until the end, it rose to 5
dollars
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 per person, an increase more than double
of
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that of
year
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the year
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 1980.
while
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 other countries had nearly similar growth in the first
half decade
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,reaching all to 1 dollar, Denmark levelled off at
this
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 cost for a decade
thereafter
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.
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, it showed a growing trend, more than triple, until 2000, and ended up over 3
dollars
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.
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, after 1980, Switzerland and
UK
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the UK
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 did not spend more
money
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 on these
type
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types
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 of
energy
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sources
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 per person;
therefore
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, both of them experienced fluctuations between almost zero and one during the period. And they finished at nearly $0.5
dollars
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 in the
last
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 year.
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, Spain was more interested in clean
energy
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sources
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,
whereas
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 Uk
along with
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 Switzerland invested the least amount of
money
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 per capita.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, sources, energy, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • expenditure
  • investments
  • renewable energy
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • growth rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data representation
  • research funding
  • energy sources
  • historical trends
  • country comparison
  • significant changes
  • period under review
  • increase/decrease
  • economic implications
  • environmental impact
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