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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the amount of
money
, which four countries invested in renewable
sources
 of
energy
 between 1975 and 2000.
Although
 at the beginning, all countries put the same negligible amount of
money
for
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into
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 developing renewable
energy
sources
, Spain spent much more than others afterwards. Having
an
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 steep increase for the first five years, it reached
to
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2
dollars
 per person in 1980;
then
 with a moderate upward trend until the end, it rose to 5
dollars
 per person, an increase more than double
of
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that of
year
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the year
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 1980.
while
 other countries had nearly similar growth in the first
half decade
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,reaching all to 1 dollar, Denmark levelled off at
this
 cost for a decade
thereafter
.
Then
, it showed a growing trend, more than triple, until 2000, and ended up over 3
dollars
.
However
, after 1980, Switzerland and
UK
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the UK
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 did not spend more
money
 on these
type
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 of
energy
sources
 per person;
therefore
, both of them experienced fluctuations between almost zero and one during the period. And they finished at nearly $0.5
dollars
 in the
last
 year.
Overall
, Spain was more interested in clean
energy
sources
,
whereas
 Uk
along with
 Switzerland invested the least amount of
money
 per capita.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, sources, energy, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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