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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media platform. Discuss both views.

In the modern era,
people
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 are really updated and some
people
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believes
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 newspapers are the best way to get new
information
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,
other
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while other
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people
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thinks
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 social media platform is the best way to get
news
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. In
this
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both views.
Firstly
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, some
people
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 have suggested
to read
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reading
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 the newspapers to get new
information
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 because
it has
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they
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published
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 everything in one.
For instance
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, in the newspaper, an article explains very clear
information
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 about the statement of content, especially, politics, cinema and sports.
Additionally
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, the content
shows
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is shown
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 in dark letters with high
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lights
,
it
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which
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 really helps to find the context by the readers. There are
also
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benefit
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 to
get
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getting
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 free magazines of new engineering cars, actors,
business
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businesses
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,
politicians
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and politicians
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. These newspapers
published
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are published
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 in different languages,
buyers
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and buyers
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 can get
it
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them
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 from their own mother tongue so it is really helpful to read
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them
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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thinks
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the
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apply
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social platform is the best choice to get new
information
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 because there is no more money to spend extra and the
news
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 will
have
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be
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 updated daily and we can read it from anywhere.
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, in recent days,
people
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 are getting
news
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in
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on
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 their mobile
phone
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phones
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while
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 travelling, it is really encouraged by
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apply
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society,
these kind
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this kind
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 of approach
it
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apply
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saves
the
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time and money.
Apart from
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this
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, we can share the
news
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to
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 others easily.
Moreover
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, the
continous
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continuous
 usage of mobile
phone
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phones
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 consequences
as
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in
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eye
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problem
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problems
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.
To conclude
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, some
people
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thinks
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 reading
newspaper
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a newspaper
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 is
the
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a
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 good choice to have some
benefit
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benefits
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 like free magazines, the content should be easier to read and the given
information
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 is
to
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apply
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be clear, others like using social media
platform
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platforms
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 is the better way to read it and more advantages to
save
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saving
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 time
while
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 travel, shares
news
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infromation
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information
 to others. In
this
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people
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 can read anything, it is based on their
indvidual
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individual
 requirements.

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task achievement
Ensure to address all parts of the task more thoroughly by extending your discussion on each viewpoint with more details or contrasting ideas.
language accuracy
Work on spelling and language accuracy to avoid small mistakes, such as "believes" instead of "believe" or "information is to be clear" instead of "information is clearer."
task achievement
Further develop your points with examples and explanations for greater clarity and to better support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by using more topic sentences and clearer transitions between ideas to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Your essay successfully presents both views concerning the topic on news sources, providing a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear, with a succinct overview of your main arguments.
task achievement
The essay includes examples relevant to the topic, such as the role of newspapers in highlighting information and the convenience of using mobile phones for news updates.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • news consumption
  • editorial standards
  • reliable
  • tactile experience
  • ritualistic
  • in-depth analysis
  • immediate
  • breaking news
  • tailor newsfeeds
  • misinformation
  • fact-checking
  • environmental impact
  • digital carbon footprint
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