Some people believe that housing is a basic human right for all individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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basic
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human right for all
people
. I partly agree with it. Nowadays
acomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
is a basic human need,
however
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the absence of it gives noticeable disadvantages. Lack of housing today
gives
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a lot of problems in forming society
cell
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. Unfortunately,
individuals
are not able to have decent and prosperous
family
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families
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without housing.
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of
happy
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and
full
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formed family cell society will get increased
crime
level and homeless rate
due to
lack of
acomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
. Housing is a basic human need and
government
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should be interested in future of
their
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citizens and country.
However
, giving flats to everyone is a mistake and it may provide some fatal problems for
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and life
cities
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. Giving housing to all
individuals
in
new
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district may provide issues in future connected to
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built
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and
economy
. Unemployed
who
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people
have gotten
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brand new
flat
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more likely not to get a job in future which in turn will not give back to
economy
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money that
were
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spent on free housing. It is already known that districts with unemployed
individuals
and poor families have increased
crime
level
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and
more
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likely to turn into
ghetto
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in
couple
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of years.
That is
why housing should be provided only to working
people
to make their
life
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easier but not to spread
crime
and unemployment. In conclusion, housing is a basic right of all
individuals
however
, society
do
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not need to forget their responsibilities like work. Housing
need
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to be provided only for employed
people
to decrease
risk
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of
crime
and
economy
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stagnation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal right
  • social security
  • sustainable housing
  • affordable housing
  • economic disparity
  • social welfare
  • public health
  • stability
  • government responsibility
  • poverty alleviation
  • moral obligation
  • ethical responsibility
  • human dignity
  • social equity
  • basic necessity
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