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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that it is possible to describe someone's culture and character from their choice of clothing. I completely agree with
this
 statement because
people
 wear clothes
according to
 their cultural backgrounds, and their
senses
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sense
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 of clothing illustrates their cultural identity.
Moreover
, their characters
also
 illustrate their preferences
of
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for
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 clothing.
People
 from all over the world choose clothes
according to
 their cultural backgrounds. Generally, they prefer to wear the same clothing that their forefathers wore in the past. Clothing
according to
 culture provides a feeling of
idenity
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identity
, and
people
 feel comfortable with it.
For example
, many Bangladeshi men love to wear a traditional clothing named "lungi" because their previous generations used to
wore
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 it. Many Bangladeshi
people
 believe that
this
clothe
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clothing
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 defines their Bangladeshi identity.
Moreover
, preference
of
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for
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 clothing describes a person's character because
people
 usually want to wear clothes
according to
 their choices. A person's thoughts, ideas, religious beliefs, and knowledge decide what they will wear. Seeing someone's
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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, one can easily tell what these
people
 are, what their thoughts and feelings are, whether they are fashionable or stylish or not .
For example
,
muslim
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Muslim
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 women, whose religious beliefs are so strong,
they
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apply
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wear
"hijab"
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a "hijab"
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 because their lord has ordered them to do so. In conclusion, I completely agree with the viewpoint that a person's character and culture decide their choices of clothing.
People
 love to dress themselves
according to
 their cultural backgrounds and religious beliefs.
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coherence cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures to enhance the fluency of your writing.
task achievement
Provide a bit more analysis or explanation for your examples to deepen the reader's understanding.
introduction conclusion present
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion which helps in understanding your stance effectively.
relevant specific examples
Your examples are relevant and effectively illustrate your points related to cultural and clothing choices.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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