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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs depict the influence of electrical use in households and how many
hours
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 per
week
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 that
need
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 for housework in households in one nation from 1920 to 2019.
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, all kinds of electronic devices in
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 graph increased in all
time
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 periods
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time
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 spent showed a descending trend from the initial period. In 1920, the domestic that had
a
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refrigerators was approximately 3% compared to 30% for vacuum cleaners and 40% for washing machines.
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, in 1960 refrigerator users skyrocketed surpassing laundry
machine
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machines
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 and floor
cleaner
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 at 90%.
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 washing appliances remained higher over 20 years, it dropped slightly in 1980 before rebounding marginally and reaching 72% for the final portion in 2019.
On the other hand
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, vacuum robots shared a similar number with laundry robots in 1960 and continued climbing over the
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 year, showing 100% in 2000 and 2019. In the second paragraph, the amount of
time
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 spent cleaning the house dropped gradually by 15% every twenty years until 1960, from 50
hours
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/
week
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 to 35
hours
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week
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 to 20
hours
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/
week
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. In 1980, the total
time
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 declined insignificantly before steady and falling again in 2019 by 10
hours
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/
week
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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