The following graph shows changes in marine life populations in several years in a body of salt water. Report the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

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bar graph depicts variations in seal, whale, and dolphin

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population

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from 2006 to 2018 with intervals of four years in the Georgia Strait. As reflected by the y-axis the

population

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measured from zero to 60 animals with intervals of ten. At first glance, it becomes clear that

dolphin

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the dolphin

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population

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grew from one

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to the

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seal

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the seal

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population

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decreased and increased

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whale

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the whale

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population

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remained relatively stable.

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, the populations of

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sea mammals were the lowest in 2010 and highest in 2018. In more detail, dolphins numbered around 17 in 2006, they increased by five in 2010,

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more in 2014, and became the highest

population

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of all three creatures in 2018, at

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52 dolphins.

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, seals had the highest numbers in 2006 at 43

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decreased to nearly half in 2010 (25 seals), and

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increased in the next two periods, 35 in 2014 and 45 in 2018. Whale populations,

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, remained relatively stable throughout these time periods, numbering closer to the mid-20s.

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, the lowest

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populations for these intelligent aquatic animals can be observed in 2010 with an average of 23, and the highest in 2018 with a mean of 40 mammals. In summary, the

population

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changes for each of these three sea mammals in the Georgia Straits

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significantly different,

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fluctuation

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, and stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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225 words

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The following graph shows changes in marine life populations in several years in a body of salt water. Report the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Discuss advantages and disadvantages of watching horror movies.

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What are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Write a letter to the sports center manager. In your letter: -Explain the problem. -Say how you feel about this problem. -Say what steps you would like the manager to take.