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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the amount of money spent on renewable
energy
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research
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 in four countries from 1975 to 2000.
Overall
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the
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significant spending on
the
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research
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 could be seen in
Denmark
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 and
Switzerland
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,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 and Spain showed the lowest
increase
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 over 25 years. The
countries
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country
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 that
spend
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spent
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 the most
in
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on
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 renewable
energy
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research
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 was
Switzerland
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.
Switzerland
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 and
Denmark
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 saw a dramatic rise
of
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 spending on renewable
energy
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research
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 reaching $2 in 5 years. Compared to
Switzerland
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 which always
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increase
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increased
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 their spending on renewable
energy
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research
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,
Denmark
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 met major drawbacks and it
becomes
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became
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 stagnant
in
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from
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 1980 to 1990. In summary, all countries had increased their spending budget on renewable
energy
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research
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 in the first 5
year
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years
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.
However
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,
Switzerland
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 was the only country which always showed
the
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an
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increase
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increasing
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 trend respectively for 25 years.
Although
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Denmark
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 showed a stagnant between 1980 to 1990, they did not step back on their spending for renewable
energy
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research
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 and experienced
major
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a major
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increase
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 in the following year.
By contrast
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and Spain were always
on
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at
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 the bottom when it came to their spending
research
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, research, denmark, switzerland, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • expenditure
  • investments
  • renewable energy
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • growth rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data representation
  • research funding
  • energy sources
  • historical trends
  • country comparison
  • significant changes
  • period under review
  • increase/decrease
  • economic implications
  • environmental impact
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