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Band 2.5

Wealth countries frequently give money to poorer countries.

Wealth
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countries
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 frequently give
money
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 to poorer
countries
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however
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thus
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 still enough wealth
poverty
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in poverty
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.
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, improved
countries
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 should give other
countries
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 of help
to
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when poor
countries
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 rather than financial aid On the one
hand
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, the whose
countries
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 added to around opinion. The developed
countries
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 give
money
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countries
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 of people to help the poor
countries
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 for and foremost. The poor
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 false enough
money
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 fan developed
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 for
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on
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the
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other
hand
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for instance
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 financial
a
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rides and medical sides. The poor enough doctors they are help to
improved
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countries
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.
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hand
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, The developed
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 corporations with poor
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these friend
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this friend
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 improved and various
acidence
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accidence
evidence
incidence
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hand
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 and a
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. The poor
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enough
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have enough
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efford
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effort
afford
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way
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 and
then
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 people overs
improved
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 to
afford
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afford it
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. First poor
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 their enough time
to
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for
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 various activities
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 their activities
very
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are very
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benefit
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beneficial
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 all the
times
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time
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. These are earn
money
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 and new
stone
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stones
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 to open. In conclusion, rich
countries
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 give enough
money
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 to poorer
countries
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what
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which
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it
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is
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 enough solution
of
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to
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 poverty
and
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those
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. Developed
countries
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 should give others many poor
countries
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of
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help mainly
agree
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agree on
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 second opinion
to
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on
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financial
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a financial
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goal
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goals
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. Those
the
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poorer
countries
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 to different
way
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ways
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 of activities
all
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them
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these are the poor
countries
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 to figure of the developed
countries
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coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure. Ensure the introduction clearly presents your main argument, and the conclusion effectively summarizes your main points without introducing new ideas. Moreover, connect your ideas in a logical sequence.
coherence and cohesion
The main points are not well-supported. Use specific examples or evidence to substantiate your claims. This will strengthen your arguments and provide clarity to the reader.
task response
The task response is incomplete. Aim to address both sides of the topic comprehensively. Clearly present your stance and substantiate it with detailed explanations and examples.
task response
The language used is unclear, and ideas are not expressed comprehensively. Work on structuring your sentences better to convey your arguments effectively and assist the reader in following your points.
task response
The essay attempts to address the prompt by discussing the role of financial aid from wealthier countries to poorer countries.
coherence and cohesion
There is an effort to conclude the argument by summarizing key points, though the conclusion could be more cohesive.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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