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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the different kinds of situations related to anthropology
graduates
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 classified into 6 groups,
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 the table shows the amounts of salaries that they are given after 5 years.
Overall
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, it is evident that
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 the most significant number of
graduates
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 have a full-time job, the lowest percentages of
graduates
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 have a part-time job or study postgrad.
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, half of the graduated individuals who work in the government sector are given more than $100.000, 5 per cent of them and
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 5 per cent of freelance consultants are received the lowest amounts of salaries.
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 with, the highest proportion of
graduates
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, 52% have full-time jobs.
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 full-time postgrad study and unknown positions are similar to percentages at 8%, the percentage of part-time work is 15%.
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, unemployed individuals
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 12% of the total.
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,5% of anthropology
graduates
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 working in government sectors and freelance consultants, and
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 10% of private companies are given between $ 25.000 and $49.999

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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