Some People prefer to provide help and support to those in the local community who need it. Others, however, prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been argued that

people

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are required to help their surrounding community rather than donate to more general charity corporations.

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I believe those organizations are able to spend that voluntary income much better, I partially oppose the idea. I think that closer and local

charities

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are far more trustworthy than the ones across the globe. On one hand, it is more reliable to donate to an institution that has less experience in the matter. Most

charities

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inside a community are small in size resulting in fewer professional

people

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and fewer connections in the field.

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having the profession prevents unnecessary expenses and prioritizes

people

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who are more in need of that funding.

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, most

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inside Farmaniyeh District, where I live, spend the fortune given to them mostly on the construction of religious places ending up helping fewer

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who are in need.

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money can be given to the United Nation-certified institutions.

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, there are too many untrustable corporations on that large scale. Not only it is more convenient the identify a reliable nearby and small establishment, but

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it is easier to transact the funds to them without getting scammed in the middle of the way.

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, most international and national establishments may support teams that might run other operations, which might not be so charitable, parallel to their kind works and if you want to make sure that your money will be used for a good cause, you would prefer to use local corps.

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, research conducted by Harvard University shows that almost 20 per cent of charitable funding goes to groups with terrorist connections in Africa and, another study conducted by the World Health Organisation points out that half of the ads relating to nourishment

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are in fact scams and they are

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really profitable in the subject. In conclusion, it can be more suitable to donate to the big institutes for charity work.

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, giving

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money to local organizations may prevent scams.

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Task Achievement

Try to provide a more balanced view by giving equal weight to both sides of the argument. Although you present arguments for both perspectives, your opinion heavily leans towards local charities throughout the essay. Expand on the strengths of national and international organizations to enhance balance in your discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure your paragraphs have clear topic sentences to guide the reader through your ideas and enhance the logical flow of your essay. You might consider adding more transitions between sentences for better coherence.

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While you have provided some examples, they could be more specific and detailed. Providing more quantitative or qualitative evidence would make your argument stronger and more persuasive.

Task Achievement

You have presented a clear opinion on the issue and provided reasoning to support it, which shows your engagement with the topic.

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Your use of examples from personal experience and academic research strengthens your argument and shows your ability to introduce relevant information.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

338 words

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