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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the activities of
anthoropology
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anthropology
graduates
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 from a distinct university
did
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when they finished their undergraduate degree course. The table illustrates
salaries
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the salaries
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 of anthropology
graduates
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 after five
years'
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years
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work
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of work
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.
Overall
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, a whole host of
graduates
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'
detination
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destination
 goes for
full time
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full-time
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work
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 and part-time
work
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 and postgrad study is the least selection for
graduates
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.
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, government sector and freelance consultants
achieve
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earn
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higher
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more
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 money, compared to private companies. Regarding
to
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apply
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the pie chart, individuals mainly desire to have full-time
work
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 which is 52 per
cent
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, which is about a half of them. The other half of
graduates
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 go for part-time
work
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, unemployed, full-time postgrad study, part-time
work
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 and postgrad study, and unknown which are 15, 12, 8, 8, 5 per
cent
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 respectively.
According to
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 the table,
government
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the government
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 sector and freelance consultants has more salaries, compared to private companies, and they gain relatively similar to each other which are 5
percent
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per cent
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 for 25,000 to 49,999, and
and
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apply
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roughly 50 per
cent
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in
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for
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 100,000 and over. Private companies achieve less than other sectors which starts from 10 per
cent
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 to 30 per
cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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