The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration below shows how a biofuel known as ethanol is made.
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, we can separate the process into four different stages. First of all, the raw material,
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,
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the processing, followed by the final ethanol and
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, how it comes back to nature. In the first two stages, plants and trees are harvested and
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transported
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to a pre-processing
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stage, where
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material is converted into cellulose. After that, it is transported to a laboratory where cellulose is worked
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transform it into another state.
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process is at the same time both the primary and scientific sectors. Later, the cellulose is transformed into sugars after a scientific procedure
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microbes
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added to
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get the ethanol. It is introduced into vehicles
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as cars, planes or trucks. These machines release a gas called Carbon Dioxide
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is essential for the trees and
plants
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plants'
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growth
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the system can be done again.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • procurement
  • raw materials
  • milled
  • surface area
  • fermentable substance
  • enzymes
  • yeast
  • fermentation
  • byproducts
  • isolate
  • purified
  • distillation
  • concentration
  • containers
  • distribution
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