It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
There is a
change
in trend among young individuals around the world. More and more students are now opting away from science fields as a career. Seeing others who choose technology related
subjects struggling and social Add a hyphen
technology-related
media
are the main reasons for that, and this
change
is going to affect the development and scientific progress.
To begin
, social media
and internet
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the internet
has
made us aware of everything that Change the verb form
have
happened
around us. Wrong verb form
is happening
Therefore
, when people
see scientists, doctors and engineers struggling in their careers, it influence
them to Change the verb form
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change
their mind
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minds
Moreover
, on the contrary
, when people
see those who do not have university
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a university
education
and those who have opted business related fields are making more money, earlier thin life, it definitely affects their thinking. When people
come to know about these folks through Facebook, TikTok and other platforms they are influenced by them. For example
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conducted by a university in India found that Add an article
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the number
people
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have
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last
decade.
All these changes are negatively impacting the society. Firstly
, when less
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fewer
people
are applying for higher education
, it will ultimately decrease the competition and the standard of education
as well. This
will reduce the number of professionals available for jobs. Consequently
, their standard and quality will also
decrease. Moreover
, because of this
trend, education
level is also
declining.
In conclusion, media
influence and the struggle face
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people
are the main causes for this
change
and it will negatively impact the future. Therefore
, it is recommended to
that governments should take certain actions to promote Change preposition
apply
education
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