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It is often argued that developed rich countries contribute to other poor countries.

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It is often argued that developed rich
countries
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 contribute to other poor
countries
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 by providing different
kind
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kinds
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 of help rather than financial
aid
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.
While
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 some believe providing other types of help is
unnecessity
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unnecessary
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 responsibility for modern
countries
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. I completely believe different
kind
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kinds
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 of
support
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to
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for
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the
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apply
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poor
countries
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 can be beneficial for
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country's
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the country's
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 poor families and
goverenment
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government
 more than financial
support
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.
Firstly
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 if rich
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country
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countries
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pay
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 attention to invest food products for poor
countries
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, it can be useful for
poor
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the poor
a poor
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population
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 who
suffered
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 from
femine
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famine
feminine
 in
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country
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their country
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.
This
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 is because
this
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type
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individuals
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of individuals
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 want food and drinks more than
money
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.
Although
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 they give
money
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 to
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population
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the population
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, people
have
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do have
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 not any productive fields to grow any
type
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 of plant or harvest.
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, there are numerous electrifying
countries
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 in the world, they can provide
with
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apply
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electr
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electric
 or
gas poor
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gas-poor
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countries
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. Because some
countries
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 even do not know what is
electr
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electric
 or gas in
whole
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 world.
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, many regions in
the
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Central Africa
have
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 not any gas or
electr
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electricity
 supply and they
also
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 want
this
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type
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 of life
as well as
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 New York or France. So, I think it would be better
provide
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to provide
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 them with
this
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type
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 of
things
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thing
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 than
money
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. From the perspective of rich
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countries
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countries,
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this
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type
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 of
support
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 can be profitable and cheaper for their financial
aid
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 to poor
countries
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. Even though they will give
any
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financial
aid
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 to poor
countries
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, I think
this
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money
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 will spent
for
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on
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country's
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the country's
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 general improvement. The
more
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population
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's situation will grow day by day.
Furthermore
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,
this
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type
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 of work will increase
rich
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the rich
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country
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's reputation for
low
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a low
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 developed
country
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, people can imagine better these
country
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's products in
whole
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the whole
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 world.
This
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, in turn, creates
more
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a more
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 harmonious and strong
band
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bond
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 between
countries
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.
On the other hand
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, some critics think financial
suppert
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support
 is more important than any kind of help.
Then
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 rich
countries
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 are not obligated to provide poor
countries
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 with other things.
Hovewer
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However
, it is crucial to note that financial
support
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 is not useful all time. Sometimes even simple things can be more
beneficitable
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beneficial
 than others. In conclusion,
while
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believes
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believe
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 developed
countries
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 should give other types of help to the poorer
countries
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 rather than financial
aid
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,
but
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apply
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I
financial
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believe other kinds of help can be both useful for poor
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countries
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countries'
country's
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population
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populations
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 and rich
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countries
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countries'
country's
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reputation
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reputations
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your essay well and presents your position clearly.
task achievement
You address the question with a reasonable level of depth and explore different dimensions of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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