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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 pie chart depicts the ratio of the increased income for anthropologists in 5 years after the graduation and different types of destinations they
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 with. It is clear from the graph that the graduates who
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 in the full-time sector have higher capacity.
According to
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 what is shown, the individuals who
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 on full-time postgrad study accounted for 8 per cent. The other who combined postgrad study and part-time
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are
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 the lowest category,
whereas
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 those who only have part-time
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 comprise double the number as it represents 15%. The salaries after 5 years of experience increased by 100,000 dollars for some employees who
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 in the government sector and their ratio is considered to be massive. Freelance consultants' salaries usually range from 75,000 dollars to more than 100,000 dollars equally distributed between these two categories.
To sum up
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, we could say that still, some Anthropologists seem to be jobless after graduation and they accounted for 12 per cent.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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