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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or dis agree?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #dis
Nowadays, we can feel about how technology has a great influence on human life. We know
slowly
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 there will be a higher possibility of leaving printing materials,
such
 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
, because they
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 not
popular
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 as the online platform which
make
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 reading easier and more interesting. First of all, the increasing
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accesibility
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accessibility
 and convenience
from
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 digital platforms make
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
 more accessible to global
audience
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audiences
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. The
accesibility
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accessibility
 offers convenience for readers to access the news and
books
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anytime and anywhere.
Secondly
, the online platform gives
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cost benefits compared with purchasing physical copies or
books
,
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 the savings from avoiding printing and distribution expenses.
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,
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 aspect, the benefits of going digital include reducing paper waste and
lower
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carbon
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the carbon
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 footprint
accociated
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associated
 with large-scale paper production.
On the other hand
, argue that despite digital advancements, there is an enduring appeal to owning physical
books
 or newspapers,
such
 as the tactile experience, collectability, and preference for screen-free reading. Some people prefer to read manually using paper rather than access online news. It keeps the library in existence and
books
 are always there. In conclusion,
according to
 the above statements, there will be more vulnerability to avoid consuming conventional materials
such
 as newsletters and novels
due to
 the low cost and comfort. Though, I thoroughly agree with
this
 argument.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital platforms
  • Global audience
  • Cost benefits
  • Environmental benefits
  • Carbon footprint
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen-free reading
  • Credibility
  • Misinformation
  • Digital divide
  • Access to digital resources
  • Lack of reliable internet
  • Enduring appeal
  • Collectability
  • Physical copies
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