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You have received the invitation to take part in your friend's wedding ceremony, but you will be in Canada on a business trip on that day with your boss. Write to your friend to apologise for not being able to take part in the wedding ceremony. In your letter: - Thank your friend for the invitation, - Explain why you will not be able to visit, - Suggest another plan.

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Hey Mandeep, Hope
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you are doing well. I'
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affaird
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afraid
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 can't attend your wedding
party
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 because of some reasons.
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 very
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glad
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 me on your special day. Unfortunately,
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 will not attend
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party
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 because
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and my boss going to Australia to attend
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friday
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.
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, we
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the flights
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flights
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 schedule and no flight is earlier than
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. I just confirmed with my boss before your invitation and
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 unable to cancel it because right now no other
collegues
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colleagues
colleges
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 have to go there. As you know my birthday is
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 coming in two weeks after your wedding and
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 am going to organise
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 at my
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 and
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 happy to invite both of you
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birthday
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the birthday
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party
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as well as
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 will introduce your husband
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 my family. I can't wait to see you in my house and we will recall our childhood memories. Lots of love Harpreet
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organization
Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. For example, one paragraph for the invitation, one for the apologies, and one for the new plan.
coherence
Work on the logical flow of ideas, ensuring that each point naturally follows the next. This can help improve coherence and cohesion.
structure
The letter has a clear opening and closing, which is essential for greeting and ending appropriately.
tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and apologetic, which is suitable for the context of explaining an absence to a friend.
task response
The letter addresses all parts of the task: thanking for the invitation, explaining the absence, and suggesting another plan, showing a good task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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