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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150words. (20 mins.)
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The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
informative
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information
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 about
population
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the population
a population
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 of the percentage of
computer
ownership
 in the
population
, and by
level
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the level
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 of academic since 2002 projections through 2010. The general overview is that. There was
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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maintain
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an
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apply
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upward trajectory of
computer
occupant
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occupants
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 over
eight
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a
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years
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year
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 period. The education level and
computer
ownership
 revealed experience correlation and sustained growth over
year
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the year
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. In 2002
The
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overall
computer
ownership
 was around fifty-five
percent
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per cent
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 of the
population
 the lowest point of the bar.
This
 figure experienced
a
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an
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 upward trend, reaching the apex
approximately
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of approximately
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 seventy-five
percent
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per cent
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 by 2010. It is important to highlight that, the
post graduation
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post-graduation
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 group highest held
computer
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computers
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 in 2010
compare
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compared
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 with others. For academic level associated with
computer
 possessor in
similar
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a similar
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 trend.
In non-diploma
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 of high school graduation
found
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reach
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 the nadir in 2002 but
increase
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increased
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of
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in
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ownership
with in
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within
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 eight
year
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years
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.
On the other hand
, the
population
 of
postgraduation
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postgraduates
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 remarkably acquired
computer
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computers
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 in 2002
compare
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compared
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 with non-diploma
of
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apply
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high school
graduation
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graduates
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 around fifty-five
percent
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per cent
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 in difference.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, computer, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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