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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150words. (20 mins.)
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The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
informative
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information
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 about
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population
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the population
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 of the percentage of
computer
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ownership
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 in the
population
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, and by
level
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the level
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 of academic since 2002 projections through 2010. The general overview is that. There was
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significantly
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maintain
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an
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apply
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upward trajectory of
computer
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occupant
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occupants
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 over
eight
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a
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years
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year
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 period. The education level and
computer
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ownership
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 revealed experience correlation and sustained growth over
year
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the year
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. In 2002
The
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apply
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overall
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computer
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ownership
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 was around fifty-five
percent
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per cent
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 of the
population
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 the lowest point of the bar.
This
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 figure experienced
a
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an
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 upward trend, reaching the apex
approximately
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of approximately
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 seventy-five
percent
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per cent
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 by 2010. It is important to highlight that, the
post graduation
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post-graduation
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 group highest held
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computer
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computers
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 in 2010
compare
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compared
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 with others. For academic level associated with
computer
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 possessor in
similar
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a similar
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 trend.
In non-diploma
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 of high school graduation
found
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was found
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reach
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to reach
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 the nadir in 2002 but
increase
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increased
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of
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in
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ownership
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with in
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within
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 eight
year
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years
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.
On the other hand
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, the
population
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 of
postgraduation
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postgraduates
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 remarkably acquired
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computer
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computers
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 in 2002
compare
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compared
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 with non-diploma
of
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apply
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high school
graduation
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graduates
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 around fifty-five
percent
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per cent
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 in difference.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, computer, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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