The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon.
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The diagram illustrates the development of a
salmon
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from
egg
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an egg
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during its life cycle.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there are three distinct stages illustrated in the process, commencing with producing eggs in the upper
river
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and ending with the development of an adult
salmon
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. The first
stage
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is when the
salmon
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eggs have been laid among small stones and reeds in the
slow moving
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upper
river
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. These natural boundaries are needed to protect them from predators and rising temperatures.
This
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stage
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continues approximately from five to six months. The next step
after
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this
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is fry, which is from three to eight cm, immigrates to the
fast flowing
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fast-flowing
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lower
river
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where it changes its
color
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colour
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from blue to turquoise,
grows
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and grows
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the
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apply
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lengths from twelve to fifteen cm.
On
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this
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stage
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, it’s called smolt and it resides
around
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four years. Gradually, the smolt travels to the open sea where its body becomes bigger from seventy to
seventy six
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seventy-six
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cm and
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the color
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color
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colour
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is transformed to
the
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grey, it is done to survive
while
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it travels. Adult
salmon
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lives
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live
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here for around five years after which it returns to the upper
river
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to produce eggs on the final
stage
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. Having completed all these steps, the lifecycle will
then
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begin again.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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