The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates in
production
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changes of
suits
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,
dresses
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, and coats in a garment factory over a 20-year period
since
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from
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1990 to 2010. The figure is represented in millions. It's obviously to be seen that the
production
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of coats increased dramatically from 1990 to 2010.
Secondly
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, the garment factory produced
suits
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rose sharply from 1990 to 1995. After that, the manufacture of
suits
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declined significantly from 1995 to 2005, and
then
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slightly increased from 2005 to 2010.
Thirdly
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, there was little growth in the
production
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of
dresses
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from 1990 to 2010. Looking more closely at the line graph represents the manufacturing of coats was highest than
suits
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and
dresses
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from 7.5
million
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increased to 25
million
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over a 20-year period.
Furthermore
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, the
production
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of
suits
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more fluctuated than
dresses
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from 1990 to 2005.
Lastly
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, the figure demonstrates the manufacturing of
suits
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similar to
dresses
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gentlely surged were 19
million
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and 15
million
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respectively from 2005 to 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, suits, dresses, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production volume
  • Garment factory
  • Trend (increasing, decreasing)
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fluctuations
  • Market demand
  • Technological advancements
  • Production capacity
  • Raw material availability
  • Economic conditions
  • Notable observations
  • Significant shifts
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